I hate the way I feel everyday, I hate to say I ain’t going to stay, I’m slowly going to fade, I can’t take no more of this pain, It’s all too much nothing to gain, I plan my escape, then I will feel free and alive, with no more tears to
I used to have a visitor who kindly advised me not to post depressive poems. I appreciate his advice. I try to avoid negative words. However, I do think it’s a sweet attention and positive encouragement if the poem is published. They do need advice and they do need to express! So here it is, and sorry David, I did modification. I would suggest you to read the comments on the following poem and the comments on other similar poems and they may be of help; you can also write down your specific story or your thoughts in detail and you will be able to get more constructive advice.
I agree with Min Min on this one but it was a nice poem and if you get advice your writing will be more effective, trust me Min Min always want to help and she is a great person and do not be angry that she modified your poem because it is for the best.
Min Min said on June 2, 2007
I used to have a visitor who kindly advised me not to post depressive poems. I appreciate his advice. I try to avoid negative words. However, I do think it’s a sweet attention and positive encouragement if the poem is published. They do need advice and they do need to express! So here it is, and sorry David, I did modification. I would suggest you to read the comments on the following poem and the comments on other similar poems and they may be of help; you can also write down your specific story or your thoughts in detail and you will be able to get more constructive advice.
jazz said on June 4, 2011
I agree with Min Min on this one but it was a nice poem and if you get advice your writing will be more effective, trust me Min Min always want to help and she is a great person and do not be angry that she modified your poem because it is for the best.