You were once in love with me

You were once in love with me
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The morning has come and so you must go
like the morning’s dew or winter’s snow
I will see you again when your back in town
to calm this hectic chaos down
you were once in love with me
then you found a more reliable dependency
one that wouldn’t leave you for another
and the greater expense wasn’t that much of a bother
so now you’ve stranded me to find
a different kind of piece of mind
one that cannot accomplish a simple feat
and just like a piece it’s incomplete
you should clean up or I should tell you to leave
you say you want to cause you know Im naive
but the feeling lingers and the absence I dread
and life is the sun it’s always over my head
too bright to see it for what it is
and when you finally get it the season changes
but it’s our fault orbiting to different position





11 thoughts on “You were once in love with me”

  1. your poem isnt all that good you should try writting about better thing than that its just not something i would want to read kay thank you for listening 2 my comment babes

  2. I THINK IT'S A GREAT POEM BECAUSE I COULD RELATE TO IT AND I'M HAPPY SOMEONE WROTE SOMETHING ABOUT THIS BECAUSE IT SOMETHING THAT SEEM TO HAPPENED ALOT NOT JUST TO ME BUT TO ALOT OF PEOPL E I KNOW AND DON'T REALLY KNOW THAT MUCH SO MY COMMENT I S THAT IT A GREAT POEM AND I LIKED IT ALOT .

  3. hey elliott,
    My name is emily and i really like your poem,
    because im a film student at a high school, and
    an assignment i had was to get a poem and write
    basically a short poem and all this
    then film it and my first poem glorified marijuana
    and my teacher was gona take of on letter grade
    so I said I was gona , basically im gonna use your
    poem for my short film because im gonna shot
    it good, if you wana hear whatI will film e-mail me

  4. This poem reminds me of what one of my friend who has
    gone thru with someone who left our town for some-
    thing she couldn't control she found out that there
    was nothing better but it was too late so anyway that
    was beautiful thank you for that!
    keep on writing

  5. i like the thought or the message of your poem.. but there's something wrong wtih your delivery.. I think you have poor choice of words. try expanding your vocabulary so you could write a better one and so that you could express yourself in a better way

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